Sally Jones - The Cup Cake. Brush Up on Your Writing Skills

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Creative Writing Tutor

THE CUP CAKE

by

Sally Jones and Amanda Jones

Publisher Information

Published by GUINEA PIG EDUCATION

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Digital edition converted and dstributed in 2012 by

Andrews UK Limited

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Copyright 2011 Sally A Jones and Amanda C Jones

This pack may not under any circumstances be photocopied, without the prior consent of the publisher.

Choose a topic and start to practise writing. Each booklet has a theme to help you start to write...stories, reports, articles, letters and many more. Start collecting them now.

Guinea Pig Creative Writing booklets also provide extra practice for children who have completed:

- Creative Story Writing

- Persuasive Writing & Argument

- Information Writing

They are for children who are working at Key Stage 2 of the National Curriculum, levels 3-5 (in Years 5 and 6 of primary school), children who are working at Key Stage 3, levels 3-5 (Years 7 and 8 of Secondary School). They provide practice for all 9-13 year olds, especially children taking 11+ examinations.

First things first...

Lets learn to write non-fiction.

When you write non-fiction, you may write:

• an article
• a leaflet
• a diary
• a description.

- A description may describe the way people look, dress, their character, attitudes and abilities.

- A description may describe the way a place looks.

- A description may describe the way something feels, tastes and smells.

You must decide:

• Who will be my target audience?
• Who will read this writing?
• What is the purpose of my writing?
• Am I aiming to give somebody a picture of something I have experienced?
• Am I using my senses to impact the reader-seeing, hearing, feeling, touching, tasting?

Use imagery or figurative language:

• Metaphors - princely paper.
• Similes - feeling like a princess.
• Personification - the rustling paper whispers softly.
• Admirable adjectives and nouns - mysterious parcel.
• Powerful verbs and adverbs - rummage eagerly.

When you write to describe:

PARAGRAPH 1

• Write an introduction to set the scene.
• Have a colourful opening to get the attention of the reader.

PARAGRAPH 2, 3, 4...

• Write about each part of this experience in separate paragraphs - in the best order.

Conclusion

• Draw all your ideas together in a conclusion.

Remember:

• Use powerful words - verbs, adverbs, nouns and adjectives.
• Use similes and metaphors.
• Use connectives or conjunctions:
  • and or but (to join compound sentences)
  • or, so, if, when, while, after, before, because, unless, until, whereas, although (to join complex sentences)
  • use pronouns - who, which, whose, what, that
  • to link ideas use - firstly, later, therefore, on the other hand, at that moment, by this time, next, soon...
• Use a range of sentences -simple, compound and complex sentences
• Make personal comments

The Cup Cake

It is half term and you are out shopping with your mum. As you pass the coffee shop, you see the yummiest cake you have ever seen... You want to eat it!

What is a cup cake?

A cup cake is a sponge cake in a brightly coloured bun case, covered in thick cream and sprinkled with sugar decorations or sweets and maybe with a cherry on top.

The Cup Cake

A Story

It was almost eleven oclock when we passed the coffee shop. Mum and I had been shopping for ages. My legs were starting to ache and we were both really thirsty. The smell of hot roasted coffee drifted out of the shop and wafted into our nostrils. I pressed my nose up against the glass window and peered in at the plates piled high with pastries. Then, I saw the yummiest cakes I had ever seen. They were cup cakes covered in pale yellow icing, sprinkled with edible glitter and jellied sweets. Can I have one of those, I begged my mum.

We entered the crowded coffee shop; the pungent smell of coffee overpowered me.

Hello, smiled the assistant sweetly, what can I get for you?

A cappuccino for me, replied mum. What would you like Becky?

Ill have a lemonade please and one of those cup cakes... Mum paused and mumbled that granny was cooking lunch. I looked persuasively at her.

Please mum... please... She hesitated, in what for me felt like an agonising second. The assistant stood poised with the tongs.

...OK, well have one of those cakes as well. The tongs descended onto the cup cake. The assistant took the money and passed us the tray

Enjoy! she said. The cake sat triumphantly on its plate as I carried it carefully to an empty table and sat down.

The cafe was buzzing as people chatted together. In the background, I could hear the sound of knives and forks scraping together and babies crying... but my attention was only on the delicious, creamy cup cake that was right in front of me. I observed its swirling primrose cream, twirled up to form a tall peak, that was drizzled with sugar coated candies shaped like stars. The sweet aroma of icing was drifting up to my nose. It was making my mouth water. How could I take a bite into this? It looks too good to eat.

Mum joined me at the table. Looking at her watch, she uttered Eat up quickly. Eagerly, I picked up the delicious delicacy and peeled back the brightly coloured bun case. Filled with anticipation, I lifted the tempting cake to my lips and took a big bite into the soft sponge. I licked off the sweet icing that was dripping down the side and crunched up the candies. It was superb. It was the yummiest cake I had ever tasted but, before I knew it, it was gone.

Did you enjoy that? mum said, as she gulped her coffee down and prepared to stand up.

It was the yummiest, most scrumptious cake Ive ever tasted. The only problem: it was too small and I would quite like another one. I took a few sips of my lemonade, but... Mum stood up and moved towards the door promptly. I decided that when I saw Dad next week, I would bring him to this cafe.

Your Cake

You enter a cafe and see a cake. Describe the cake you have chosen, how you bought it and what it tasted like.

Use these questions to help you.

You see a caf

• Look in the window.
• Press your face up against the glass.
• What do you see for sale?
• Describe it.
• What do you say to your mum/dad/aunt?

You are in the caf

• You stand by the counter.
• A cafe assistant serves you.
• Write the dialogue.
• What is it like in the cafe?
• What noises and smells are there?
• What did you choose?
• How do you feel?

Use your senses to describe how you eat the cake:

• What does it look like?
• What does it smell like?
• What does it taste like?
• How does it feel in your mouth?
• Describe the experience.
• How do you feel when its eaten?
• What do you say to your mum/dad/aunt?
• Would you like another one?

Before you start to write, you may like to look at the writing tips and techniques at the back of the book.

Now write the story you planned.

The Recipe

Write down a recipe to make some cup cakes. Put the instructions in order.

To make 24 cup cakes you will need:

• 100g self raising flour
• 100g of castor sugar
• 100g of margarine
• 2 eggs
• 100g of icing sugar