Diana Hacker - The Bedford Handbook: 2020 APA Update, Eleventh Edition

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1. b; a is too vague
2. a; b is too broad
3. a; b is a question
4. b; a is too vague
5. b; a is a statement of fact

Topic sentence: Quilt making has served as an important means of social, political, and artistic expression for women. Eliminate the following sentence: They used dyed cotton fabrics much like the fabrics quilters use today; surprisingly, quilters basic materials havent changed that much over the years.

logos; ethos; pathos

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1. The Prussians defeated the Saxons in 1745.
2. Ahmed, the producer, manages the entire operation.
3. The tour guides expertly paddled the sea kayaks.
4. Correct
5. The congresswoman heard the protestors shouts as she walked up the Capitol steps.

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1. Police dogs are used for finding lost children, tracking criminals, and detecting bombs and illegal drugs.
2. Hannah told her rock-climbing partner that she bought a new harness and that she wanted to climb Otter Cliffs.
3. It is more difficult to sustain an exercise program than to start one.
4. During basic training, I was told not only what to do but also what to think.
5. Jan wanted to drive either to wine country or to Sausalito.

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1. Oranges provide more vitamin C than any other fruit.
2. The women entering the military academy can expect haircuts as short as those of the male cadets.
3. Looking out the family room window, Sarah saw that her favorite tree, which she had climbed as a child, was gone.
4. The graphic designers are interested in and knowledgeable about producing posters for the balloon race.
5. My towns high school is much larger than the neighboring towns high school.

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1. Using surgical gloves is a precaution now taken by dentists to prevent contact with patients blood and saliva.
2. A career in medicine, which my brother is pursuing, requires at least ten years of challenging work.
3. The pharaohs had bad teeth because tiny particles of sand found their way into Egyptian bread.
4. Recurring bouts of flu caused the team to forfeit a record number of games.
5. This box contains the key to your future.

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1. The manager asked her employees to submit their reports today if they had time.
2. Many students graduate from college with debt totaling more than fifty thousand dollars.
3. It is a myth that humans use only 10 percent of their brains.
4. When she looked in the closet, Daria found the old nightgown she used to wear to sleep.
5. Not all geese fly beyond Narragansett for the winter.

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1. To complete an online purchase with a credit card, you must enter the expiration date and the security code.
2. Though Martha was only sixteen, UCLA accepted her application.
3. As I settled in the cockpit, the pounding of the engine was muffled only slightly by my helmet.
4. After studying polymer chemistry, Phuong found computer games less complex.
5. When I was a young man, my mother enrolled me in tap dance classes.

Possible revisions:

• Version 1, first person

  When online dating first became available, I thought that it would simplify romance. I believed that I could type in a list of criteriasense of humor, college education, green eyes, good joband a database would select the perfect mate for me. I signed up for some services and filled out my profile, confident that true love was only a few mouse clicks away. As it turns out, however, virtual dating is no easier than traditional dating. I still have to contact the people I find, exchange emails and phone calls, and meet them in the real world. Although a database might produce a list of possibilities and screen out obviously undesirable people, it cant predict chemistry. More often than not, I find that people who seem perfect online just dont click with me in person. Electronic services do help me expand my pool of potential dates, but theyre no substitute for the hard work of romance.

• Version 2, third person

  When online dating first became available, many people thought that it would simplify romance. Hopeful singles believed that they could type in a list of criteriasense of humor, college education, green eyes, good joband a database would select the perfect mate. Thousands of people signed up for services and filled out their profiles, confident that true love was only a few mouse clicks away. As it turns out, however, virtual dating is no easier than traditional dating. Online daters still have to contact the people they find, exchange emails and phone calls, and meet in the real world. Although a database might produce a list of possibilities and screen out obviously undesirable people, it cant predict chemistry. More often than not, people who seem perfect online just dont click in person. Electronic services do help single people expand their pool of potential dates, but theyre no substitute for the hard work of romance.

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1. The X-Men comic books and Japanese woodcuts of kabuki dancers, all part of Marlenas research project on popular culture, covered the tabletop and the chairs.
2. Our waitress, costumed in a kimono, had painted her face white and had arranged her hair in a beehive.
3. Students can apply for a spot in the leadership program, which teaches thinking and communication skills.
4. Shore houses were flooded, beaches were washed away, and Brants Lighthouse was swallowed by the sea.